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09/24/09 8:50 PM

I think it takes talent to say so much with so little words.. length has nothing to do with emotion or passion.. And frankly I can always go for a quickie winking smiley don’t always have the time to sit here and read long winded poems. Like in my thread.. lol

<3

I still have those two poems you said I could print out on my wall. Still two of my favorites from all of NIN land winking smiley

 

09/24/09 9:11 PM

SunshineGirl posted:
efloresNiN posted:
lamp.........
That's really good, but might I suggest making your own damn thread? Yeah.

sorry.. didnt know this was a personal thread.....my apologies for not reading the rules....

 

09/24/09 10:13 PM

qe76 posted:
I think it takes talent to say so much with so little words.. length has nothing to do with emotion or passion.. And frankly I can always go for a quickie winking smiley don’t always have the time to sit here and read long winded poems. Like in my thread.. lol

<3

I still have those two poems you said I could print out on my wall. Still two of my favorites from all of NIN land winking smiley
hehe Thank you, very much. grinning smiley



Edited 1 time(s). Last edit at 09/24/2009 09:15PM by SunshineGirl.

 

09/24/09 10:13 PM

efloresNiN posted:
SunshineGirl posted:
efloresNiN posted:
lamp.........
That's really good, but might I suggest making your own damn thread? Yeah.

sorry.. didnt know this was a personal thread.....my apologies for not reading the rules....
That's alright.

 

09/24/09 9:59 PM

SunshineGirl posted:
Well, if I write anything, it's because I feel like writing. I know a lot of them are probably too short, but I don't like trying to make them longer just for the sake of length, because then it sounds forced. So, I don't know what to tell you.

I'm not saying to make 'em longer, but take time in them. I see you dish them out every day on here but some just don't seem quite ready. I have enjoyed some fantastic pieces in this thread and would rather see you spend more time on others then feeling like you have to update us. This is just a general feeling I get in the writing section.

 

09/26/09 8:51 PM

Reverence posted:
SunshineGirl posted:
Well, if I write anything, it's because I feel like writing. I know a lot of them are probably too short, but I don't like trying to make them longer just for the sake of length, because then it sounds forced. So, I don't know what to tell you.

I'm not saying to make 'em longer, but take time in them. I see you dish them out every day on here but some just don't seem quite ready. I have enjoyed some fantastic pieces in this thread and would rather see you spend more time on others then feeling like you have to update us. This is just a general feeling I get in the writing section.
I don't "dish them out every day" [look at the dates of the posts] and I only write when there's something I really need to get out.

 

09/26/09 8:05 PM

Hey, Reverence...care to put some of your own writing up for comparison?

 

09/26/09 8:33 PM

Sun, I thought the same thing.. how can someone say you over post..?? I wish you'd post more.. I don't think you post enough..

 

09/27/09 12:38 PM

[NSK]
The Sun will be extinguished
The Moon will cease to glow
The Rain will never fall again
The Wind will cease to blow
But you will never fade
And, Brother, neither will I
Forever we'll march on together
And we will never die...

 

09/27/09 12:39 PM

Thanks, you two. =]

 

09/28/09 8:22 PM

[Nail Polish]
Add more color until the darkness disappears
Rebel against who you were and
who you are
Make it all crooked
and tell yourself it's perfect
Just rebel against who I was
Carve a smile on these cracked pink lips
and show teeth forced into perfection
Just rebel against who I am

Must be my own negative
to purge of the memory
Ignore who I was

That didn't happen...

 

10/07/09 8:40 PM

[Religion]
I am flawed
This makes me perfect
A perfect little victim
     Victim?
     Do I let you torture me?
     Some day soon you'll break me

I am weak
This makes me strong
A strong little follower
     Follower?
     Do I let you lead me along?
     I'd be lost if not for you

I am unhappy
This makes me joyous
A joyous little wretch
     Wretch?
     Do you not save me?
     Your Holy Hand will ruin me

 

10/08/09 8:12 PM

You write very well, be proud. ^_^

I feel like it was inspired quite a lot by Reznor's poetry, but you aren't straight-up trying to clone his work, or anything near that, which is awesome. Kudos. XD

I'm very interested in reading whatever else you'll make. You seem to have a knack for poetry and rhythm. =]

 

10/11/09 8:40 PM

Thank you very much. =]

 

10/14/09 8:38 PM

[Thoughtless]
I am
other peoples' words.
Hollow
letters, hollow
sounds, hollow
noise.

I feel
their eyes on me.
Watch me
stumble, watch me
slip, watch me
fall.

They pull
my strings and laugh.
Make me
move, make me
dance, make me
writhe.

 

10/19/09 8:11 PM

[Half-Father]
Love me
Love me not
Make up your mind
and let me know

Wake up
Come on now
Fix yourself
and hold me close




Edited 1 time(s). Last edit at 10/19/2009 07:12PM by SunshineGirl.

 

10/24/09 9:57 PM

[Salvation]
A filthy little slut
borne of a filthy whore
in a filthy house
that isn't her home

She spends her wretched days
in a filthy piece of architecture
watching the other filthy animals
wallow in their own shit

She stares in disbelief
as they're lead along by the ego
and tricked into believing
They're all special
They're all unique

They're all whores

In her filthy little cell
Slowly, she suffocates
Slowly, she fades away
Slowly, she sinks
into a filthy planet
full of filthy animals
wallowing in their own shit

as her filthy body


is purified.




Edited 1 time(s). Last edit at 10/24/2009 08:58PM by SunshineGirl.

 

10/24/09 9:03 PM

This has nothing to do with anything, but HOLY HELL, MY AVATAR SHOWED UP. woo.

 

10/28/09 12:34 PM

[C'est mon DADA]
I'm a dada girl
in a dada world
Wrapped in newspapers, covered in glues
I'm just here to mock your views
I'm not ridiculous, it's just our time
And it makes you as green as a lime
Trash the envelope, blur the line
Keep the ideal, I much prefer mine
Hand me the scissors, pass me the knife
ART IS DEAD, DADA FOR LIFE!

 

10/28/09 4:51 PM

Our age less years than how we feel
This aging tends to us reveal
Her words unfurl
Our SunshineGirl
She needs nothing to Make Her Real

 

10/29/09 11:50 AM

Simmbiosis posted:
Our age less years than how we feel
This aging tends to us reveal
Her words unfurl
Our SunshineGirl
She needs nothing to Make Her Real
=X Thank you!!!!! This is beautiful. I'm blushing. =]

 

10/29/09 1:05 PM

I'm bored and stuck in school, so I'm just gonna write something just to write. I might fix it up some other time...

[matthew]
words fall on deaf ears
does the light meet blind eyes
does it not warm their soul

what is the name of the path on which they walk
is it light
is it night
is it right
is it
wrong

be not their judge

 

10/31/09 3:47 PM

[Flower]
Ease my curiosity
Show me what I want to see
Tell me what I'm meant to be
Plant the seed right next to me
And let it overtake me
until it flourishes

 

10/31/09 3:51 PM

Some older stuff...

[Sein]
To be
in one place at once
Set me
free

To see
the light that shines here now
Show me
the way

To be
in everything at once
Set me
free

To see
that nothing is real
Show me
the way
to be
free

 

10/31/09 3:52 PM

Another old one...

[Sit Down]
Calm down and close your eyes
You just need to sleep
Calm down and close your eyes
Don't think about tomorrow

Sit down and shut up
You don't know what you're saying
Sit down and shut up
Just look pretty and smile

Stop now, lovely
You're making them uncomfortable
Stop now, precious
And hold you head up high

You remind them of the truth
And you're throwing it in their faces
There's something they can't run away from
Put them back in their places

 

10/31/09 7:59 PM

[Wing]
You didn't stop
  when I ran
You didn't hear
  when I screamed
You didn't notice
  when I died

You don't seem to love me right

You only cursed
  when I smiled
You only yelled
  when I sang
You only pushed
  when I rose

You don't seem to love me right

You show it in your praises
You show it in your eyes
You show it in your embraces
  You hide it in your soul

Mama,
     you don't love me right.

 

11/05/09 12:44 PM

[The Butcher: A Reconciliation]
If imitation is suicide,
     you will never find a girl more dead.
Nothing but others' thoughts reside
     inside her empty head.

If life is but a waking dream,
     her life is a waking nightmare.
She stares and stares, trying not to scream.
     She hears the words, but tries not to care.

But these words, these taunts, these abuses,
     they serve her a great many uses.
They tell her what she could and shouldn't be;
     these words: her self-fulfilled prophecy.

If dust could praise the King of Kings,
     she would sing from beneath their feet;
but she does not take to such Sacred Things,
     and serves the Master of Deceit.

If Sun were to rise and set no more,
     she would simply turn to the Stars.
No matter who she serves, she's lost at her core,
     and only finds relief in adding more scars.

But these scars, these badges, these remembrances,
     they add up and only cause hindrances,
blocking any progress she hopes to make;
     change for the sake of change for the sake...

Life for the sake of Life-
     Tears for the sake of Tears-
Strife for the sake of Strife
     is how she's spent these years.

But, look just, deep within-
     past the filth and past the sin-
perhaps there is a beating heart
     that's not yet been torn apart.

A heart that's filled with discontentment,
     struggling for survival and unlikely love;
a heart that well knows resentment
     from the Good Lord enthroned above.

Perhaps this heart is still pure-
     I cannot judge, nor can I be sure.
It is only my place to forgiveness give,
     and let this tragic creature live.



Edited 1 time(s). Last edit at 11/08/2009 07:57PM by SunshineGirl.

 

11/05/09 2:25 PM

Resentment is a human failing
Discontentment always flailing
You are complete
Sunshine my sweet
Life just the mountain we're all scaling

 

11/05/09 7:29 PM

Danke, schön. =]

 

11/06/09 12:16 PM

[Old Left Shoe]
I miss you, my dear
I do, I do
I miss you, the one
Who signed my shoe
The only one
For me, I know
The only one
Though it mightn't show
The lack of words
Endeared me only
I came to love
If a bit slowly
But I came
To love at last

 
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